The Scouring of the Shire

[katsaris]

Two posts ago, I mentioned I had started writing a script-version of the Scouring. It's done.

If anyone's interested, you can find it here. Obviously, yet again you can expect spoilers for ROTK, film and books, in there.

Still a tad clumsy/corny at spots mind you -- and I haven't bothered (nor will I bother) putting it through my usual perfectionist-minded long stages of revision. :-) It's after all meant to be only a rough draft used to show how I think Scouring would be quite doable without making the ending any more "anticlimactic" than Jackson's own films... Fine-tuning it goes beyond the scope of this endeavour. :-)

Comments

[skaly.livejournal.com]

I like it. Scouring was one of my favorite parts in the book. Unfortunately, I don't think it belongs in the PJ version. But then, it wasn't his version that I wanted to see. It was Tolkien's, which is unfortunately not possible. No doubt PJ would have had the battle in the Shire drawn out for yet *another* long battle sequence--if he'd bothered to put it in. When all is said and done, I'd rather see *your* version of the movie. You tend to have a better grasp on words and meanings and details. PJ tried so hard to *show* us something, that he forgot that he was also supposed to *tell* us something. This is evidence that the "show, don't tell" policy doesn't always work.

Another thing that annoyed me: Corny dialogue.

Gandalf: "The board is set. The pieces, moving."
Theoden: "So it begins."

What is that supposed to be? Dramatic or something? They sound like cliches to me. If not that, then close relatives.